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Rian Greeff's avatar

Now that is how to introduce characters. Short, sweet and too the point. Each is unique, has their own pov, pushes the story, and creates intrigue. Great stuff.

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. This is my 2nd draft. I post 2 chapters each Saturday. Stay tuned

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Janine Agoglia's avatar

I can't wait to see what happens next! I definitely want to read more. Well done Jane!

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Thanks so much Janine! It's a work in progress! I'll be posting Chapters 3 and 4 next week. Stay tuned

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Kathleen Hobbs's avatar

I loved it, Jane. Looking forward to reading more.

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Thanks, so much Kathleen! It's a work in progress as I am editing this 2nd draft as I go. Chapters 3 and 4 next Saturday

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Darcy Dudeck's avatar

This is great! I’m looking forward to reading more 😊

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Thanks so much, Darcy. 38 more to go ;) This is in the rough draft phase, so more or less

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Angela Marrant's avatar

Great story 😎👌

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Thanks so much, Angela for stopping by to read and comment. Truly appreciate

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John O'Neill's avatar

You are a great writer Jane in a time when most of them are gone.

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Jane Deegan's avatar

Thanks, John. I appreciate it. I have been writing my whole life (and took a hiatus) for my careers and raising a family. I've never tried to publish. I hope to eventually for this. It's a learning curve

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